Reader comment thread for ~Better than a gold watch ~

[Sprayman]

Readers may leave comments, suggestions, or criticisms for the thread here.

[mothbrad]

OK, I wish I had more time at the moment to properly comment on these threads, or even take part, but as it is, all I can do is sit back and enjoy, and currently, I'm loving this thread, even though it's a little bit on the consensual side for me.  Great work, Spray and Kimbra! 

[Sprayman]

Glad you like it Moth - even if it's a bit soft for your tastes.

If it goes as planned by Kimbra and I, it will get stranger as time goes on, but still might not get up to the level of say... Viddler's 'Traitor'. (I wish!!!) We will try to keep you amused though!

[mothbrad]

This was going in a quite alarming direction (posts 49-51ish), but good to see that order is being restored 

[Quixote]

The role-play rocks.  I love it.

That's all I got.   

[Sprayman]

More than enough for me Quix. Glad you like it.

[mothbrad]

I don't want to be like a blow for blow sports broadcaster (if you'll excuse the pun), but I love the real sense of threat and action that's starting to come through in a big way in the past few posts (54-57). 

[Sprayman]

Will try to keep your intrest going Moth. Thanks for the kind words.

[Caliente]

Dear Sprayman and Kimbra-Allis,
I've been a lurker for awhile.  This is my first post.  I've been inspired to "jump in" so that I could congratulate you two on a very compelling story line written in well crafted prose.  This is better than anything I've read in the Stories section where, frankly, I find a lot of the writing to be someone infantile.  Do you guys type and send as the thoughts come into your head, or do you proof read and revise?  Kimbra-Allis, you do switch between first and third person frequently.  I really don't mind that so much.  Some people might.  Do you mean that to be a signature style of yours?  You also let some occasional typos get through.  But you guys are spellbinding.  Keep up the good work.

Is it okay to advertise here?  I have a story in Chapter XXX of the Stories section, called "Megan and Mom".  I would like to invite you to check it out.

[Sprayman]

Caliente,

Thanks for the kind words - much appreciated. I usually compose and write off line using 'Word and proof it when I'm finished. Then I 'cut and paste' it here. If it's a short reply, I may type on line right here. We are working together to plan the story line in broad general terms and have a rough outline of where we plan to go with it.

No problem about your 'ad' here but why don't you do an intoduction post and tell us a little about yourself. I have quite a few stories on page 29 and 30  that you might want to check out.

[Quixote]

Spray:  Letting her go?  Just rape and no real torture?  You aren't going soft, are you?

Caliente:  Speaking as the most infantile writer here, hi.  :)

[Sprayman]

Spray:  Letting her go?  Just rape and no real torture?  You aren't going soft, are you?

Yes, I'm going soft in my old age Quix. There is however a method to my senility. I just can't tell you what it is. I'll give you a hint though.

Think of an onion - all of those nice layers within layers within layers. . .

[kimbra_ailis]

Thank you for the comments....

Up till recently all my writtings have been in third person. Now I have several stories  that are first person as well as third. I try to stay in one tense but some times I dont even notice or get distracted...... I try to stay out of first person because I change between "YOU" and "HE/HIM"... Some poeple find that akward...

[mothbrad]

(as at post#120): I've just caught up on quite a few posts, and still enjoying this a lot.  Thanks kimbra_ailis and Sprayman!

[Sprayman]

Glad you are enjoying it Moth. Look for it to get a bit more odd soon! Maybe in the next 10 - 15 posts.