Karen and Michelle's Sad Story

[Dr_BuzzCzar]

Awesome!! im waiting, im waiting, im waiting!

You are inspirational!

and a little something to warm the heart while I'm here.  Ale and I were fucking the other day and i was so close to cumming but i couldn't quite get there and he stopped and knelt down and started licking my cunt which is always a nice thing but i was still struggling to go over that edge and our dog heard something and she started barking like crazy and well... i have a lot of dog thoughts.. Not about my cute labradoodle but the barking sent my mind to a nice place and i had the most earth shattering orgasm... and well.. i just thought I'd share that since you and your stories often provide some amazing fodder for some wonderful mental wandering....

Here you go Emma, just for you.

[Emma]

oo thats so pretty!  I love that style of oriental artwork. 

thank you

[redlegtiger]

Sounds like some definite hidden desires there.  Sure you don't want to try on your labradoodle for size.... if you know what I mean.  By the way, for the rest of the fans, chapter 73 is a continuation of Karen's torture session that she and the three girls came up with.  Chapter 74 is the cheerleading coaches humiliation and then a gangrape of a new character.  73 will be coming this weekend and hopefully 74 a couple of weeks later.  I just got 73 back from my editor and have to go through and aprove all the recommended changes and 74 is in first faze of editing.  I've already got chapter 75 about a third done.  So the story goes on.  I'd definitely love to hear more from the fans.

[redlegtiger]

Hey all,

Just wanted to let everyone know that I sent Emma Chapter 73 of Karen and Michelle.  I'm sure she will be posting it soon.  Please comment here on what you think of the Chapter.

[redlegtiger]

Karen and Michelle Chapter 74 will be coming by the end of the week.  Chapter 75 is finished and will be sent for the first round of editing as well.  Best guess is that 75 will be posted by the second week of September at the latest.

[redlegtiger]

Hey Fans,

Chapter 74 was just sent to Emma.  It should be posted shortly after she and Ale return.  I hope you all like this chapter.  It is heavy on humiliation and even has a gang rape.

[squirt]

Nicely written story, what i like best is: you covered a huge area of sex and BDSM, almost all that i can imagine, and some i 'd never imagine before. Keep writing this delightful story.

[redlegtiger]

Okay gang, Emma has posted chapter 74 on the story site.  Have fun reading all about the humiliation scene of the cheerleader's coach and the gang rape of a new character.

[Emma]

Nicely written story, what i like best is: you covered a huge area of sex and BDSM, almost all that i can imagine, and some i 'd never imagine before. Keep writing this delightful story.

I think it may be the most extensive story we have written in the members area squirt.  =)   I have to agree with you about the delightful-ness of it all.     

[Master Aki]

Hello together, I'm reading this story since a while now (chapter 65) and am fascinated about it for different reasons. I'm very curious if Redlegtiger is really into BDSM in real life? Sorry, it's a personal question, I know. But still I do wonder because some parts in the story are quiet...fantastic ;) Not bad, I love the extrems but surely sometimes certain details are missing, that would make the story even more "shocking" (esp. medical facts). I'm not a medical myself, yet sometimes I'm inclined to consult a Doctor in my family to ask if A and B is possible like this....
Beside that, I'm German and constantly ask myself, why they allways have pancakes and sausage for breakfast? o.O Is there nothing else you eat for breakfast? It doesn't have to get culinary here but some change might be useful (repetition mostly means death for long stories, they get boring if characters do the same things every day).
Mhh...I'm no fan of this lovey-dovey-thingy when it comes to Karen/Gregg/Sam/... I tend to overread those parts, because they sound like lame hollywood-love-movie-productions. After the first few pages in those chapters it IS totally clear, that the whole bunch is sooooOOO in love with each other :D
That reminds me: There are lots of mind shattering orgasms described here (mostly concerning females). Personally, at first I thought it nonsense from a biological point of view (freedom of writing etc., I know about that ^^) but every now and then (and later on more often)...I shouldn't tell here about my sex-life (surely everyone knows how it works XD)...my point is, that I can understand way better now what the characters experience. Gets the story more quality :)
Well, this story makes me somehow jealous and I wish to have more money to acquire my own personal dungeon :p

The Idea to illustrate the story is really great!! Maybe http://bishonenworks.com/index.htm can also help. Great artist ~_~ *love her*

*away reading more*

[redlegtiger]

Master Aki,

Thanks for the feedback.  Rest assured that all the lovey dovey stuff is a set up for what happens in the future.  Things change as situations change.  Just wait and you will see. The privilege of being an author is that you can embelish areas that may be more than real life but rest assured that a lot of the stuff that happens in the novel are based on real life stories shared with me by real life subs or masters and mistresses.  Some of the real stories I have posted in redlegtiger's lair here in the forum.  I hope you continue to read and provide feedback. I didn't realize I was in a rut for things like breakfast meals so will try to diversify.  Those are the little details that can sometimes make a difference.  I have tried my best to keep the story from getting to repetitive.  I hope I have accomplished that.  I am probably ten chapters away from finishing give or take.  By the way, chapter 75 will be comin soon.  It has been in editing and I have gotten it back.  I will go through it one more time before I send it out.  Thanks for the suggestion on an illustator.  I'll definitely check her out.  By the way, I lived in Germany for 5 years in the 80's.  I enjoyed my time there.  Your English is way better than my German ever was.

[redlegtiger]

I just sent chapter 75 to emma.  It should be posted in the next few days.  Pleasae come on in and comment on the chapter.

[Master Aki]

I've just recently spent a little bit of time reading the chapters until there was no continue button (I'm reading at bdsmlibrary.com and here the story goes as far as chapter 73). The story got better again, not only from the plot itself but also from stilistic means *thumps up*
Yet there're still too many repetitions. I'm not sure, if this applies to every reader. But I assume, that one knows after the third reading for sure how a Karen feels, when her friends are shot. And it is totally clear, that falling into depressions is a process, not a momentum that needs repetition every few breaks. You've got a really nice choise of words, but it looses its effect after the fourth or fifth reading ^^;;; The same goes for things like driving to the secrect dungeon of the girls. Explaining once the procedure of the girls getting dressed in their pony gear and loading the wheel chair is more than enough. I acctually tend to just skimming those lines in hope, the real story line continues soon. Writing in great detail is a good thing, but over time it's getting boring to read the same chapter after chapter.
Furthermore you should pay better attention to the outline of the charaters: one time they are humping a 15 year girl old and in the next break she's only 14?!? o.O *confused* The same problem exists in earliere chapters, where it is quiet hard to differ which person acctually said something, because the previous name is written instead: A said "..." and stuff happened and A said "..." (<--whereas the latter one should have been B instead).

I know, that writing such complex stories eats a lot of time and surely you have a real life beside writing ;) But maybe, after you've finished the story (or else some readers might kick your ass for not finishing it first) you find some time to re-read the whole thing and do some rewriting. Shortening some parts, or differ i.e. the meals, correcting typing errors or details like the age thingy.

If you're up to this project of rewriting I'm gladly willing to help out as much as I can :D Surely there're some other people out here, that have two eyes to look over it in order to find more things to make this story even better ^^

Mhh, beside the illustrator, how about finding someone who's willing to build all of those little (more or less nice) torturing devices that are mentioned within the story and not available on the market ?
I surely would be spend a little fortune to get such a nice dildo collection ^.^ *giggles excitedly*

[redlegtiger]

Master Aki, Thanks for your feedback.  I always enjoy constructive criticism.  I try to catch the errors before sending it to my editor.  He also reads and corrects errors.  Unfortunately we don't catch all of them.  If you notice an error like that, please let me know chapter, paragraph and line.  That way I can go back and correct the errors now instead of later.  When I get done with the story, I'll be going through it to read for my own pleasure and will make any missed corrections then.  As for Karen's depression, I kept mentioning it because each time the intent was for the depression to be worsening from previously and there was usually a reason for it to.  That was another key event in Karen's life that leads to her losing control and doggyslut becoming the dominant and controlling personality.  As far as reading the chapters, you should read the story from RPPstories archive instead of BDSM Library.  Emma has posted up to chapter 75 in the story section.  Obviously there must be something you like about the story since you keep reading it.  I hope you are enjoying it.  Writing it is a hobby and I usually work on it while I watch a movie during the evenings or weekends.  The only thing I get out of it is the pleasure of people letting me know what they like about the story.  It takes a lot of work to write so I don't think it's too much to ask my fans to let me know what they think periodically, good or bad as well as to make suggestions.  Many things in the story are in fact derived from input from fans.  Hope you enjoy Sarah's Story in Part 3 as she takes over the School and becomes the mistress of quite a few slaves of her own. 

[CrshnBrn]

I love the way the story keeps you captivated. Not just the sex scenes, though those are amazing as well, but the general flow of the story makes you want to keep reading.

I love your work Redlegtiger!

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